Falling4Fiction
is hosting a Hangers blogfest. Choose
three chapters from one of your writing projects and post the last sentence
from each. Then enter the link on their website. Winners will get a 10 page
critique.
I’ll
choose my work in progress, which is a reimagining of The War of the Worlds. Here
are three sentences designed to leave you hanging:
Chapter
11 No opportunity to unlock the door
without being seen or heard, so I flattened myself against the wall of the
house, trembling violently.
Chapter
15 My senses were overwhelmed as I lay
there, head lolling on hard wood, and I couldn’t differentiate between the
steam and the smoke obscuring my vision as I blacked out.
Chapter
18 “Poison gas.”
Great tension in all of these! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks for a heads up. It's important that writers get their work critiqued. It's interesting that they only want the last sentence from each.
ReplyDeleteAlso, as a fellow scifi fan and writer, I enjoy your blog. Following you now.
Wow. So much tension and holy crapness in these! Love the way you did them with the longer hangers then you have "Poison gas." Agh!
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
WOW! Spectacular hangers!
ReplyDeleteReally great work!
Chapter 15 has got me really intrigued, these are all fantastic :)
ReplyDeleteI'd love to know what happens in chapter 19. Will they live? I must read on.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the first hanger! Made me shake right along with the character, nice job!
ReplyDelete...no hooks? just hangers?
ReplyDeleteLove the short/sweet 'Poison gas' line :D
Whoa, what happened in Chapter 15?! I like "head lolling on hard wood," it gives me a good image to go with.
ReplyDeleteKimberly, MsMariah, Leigh: Thank you. I wasn't sure if people would like these or not.
ReplyDeleteLynne: What makes it worse is that it's cold, and at night!
J.A., Rachel: Thanks. I try to include good details, so the reader can visualize.
Cassie Mae, Martin, 1000th Monkey: Do they live? That would be telling.
Yep! Those leave me begging to know what in the world is going on!!! Great hangers :)
ReplyDeleteNice movement in the first two. In combination with the third, I really want to know what's going on!
ReplyDeleteI really like the third one. Only two words, but two words people never want to hear. I am interested in what comes next.
ReplyDeleteThese are great, very visual and intense. The third one definitely has me hooked too!
ReplyDeleteIntense! My pick is Chapter 15!
ReplyDelete"Poison gas" is a great way to end a chapter. Make me think the next chapter is a suspense filled action series.
ReplyDeletePoison gas would make me turn the page faster than I could read the words!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Hope, Emily, C.M., for your kind words.
ReplyDeleteJeannette, Nick, Stephen, and Ink: We agree that we all like poison gas, so long as it's happening to someone else.
Yeah, I want to know how that poisonous gas plays out.
ReplyDeleteThese are simple filled with tension. I want to know more. Great job.
ReplyDeleteCool sentences. Lot's of tension. Especially all of them.
ReplyDeleteWow, somebody's world sure is falling apart. Great hangers!
ReplyDeleteSounds like a lot of bad things happening! Great hangers!
ReplyDeleteWow!
ReplyDeleteThis one is my favorite:
My senses were overwhelmed as I lay there, head lolling on hard wood, and I couldn’t differentiate between the steam and the smoke obscuring my vision as I blacked out.
Great writing!