Wednesday, July 18, 2012

Hangers


Falling4Fiction is hosting a Hangers blogfest.  Choose three chapters from one of your writing projects and post the last sentence from each.  Then enter the link on their website.  Winners will get a 10 page critique. 


I’ll choose my work in progress, which is a reimagining of The War of the Worlds.  Here are three sentences designed to leave you hanging: 

Chapter 11  No opportunity to unlock the door without being seen or heard, so I flattened myself against the wall of the house, trembling violently. 

Chapter 15  My senses were overwhelmed as I lay there, head lolling on hard wood, and I couldn’t differentiate between the steam and the smoke obscuring my vision as I blacked out. 

Chapter 18  “Poison gas.”

24 comments:

Kimberly Gabriel said...

Great tension in all of these! Well done!

msmariah said...

Thanks for a heads up. It's important that writers get their work critiqued. It's interesting that they only want the last sentence from each.

Also, as a fellow scifi fan and writer, I enjoy your blog. Following you now.

Cassie Mae said...

Wow. So much tension and holy crapness in these! Love the way you did them with the longer hangers then you have "Poison gas." Agh!

Great job!

Leigh Covington said...

WOW! Spectacular hangers!
Really great work!

J. A. Bennett said...

Chapter 15 has got me really intrigued, these are all fantastic :)

Martin Willoughby said...

I'd love to know what happens in chapter 19. Will they live? I must read on.

Lynn(e) Schmidt said...

I really liked the first hanger! Made me shake right along with the character, nice job!

1000th.monkey said...

...no hooks? just hangers?

Love the short/sweet 'Poison gas' line :D

Rachel Frost said...

Whoa, what happened in Chapter 15?! I like "head lolling on hard wood," it gives me a good image to go with.

Mark Murata said...

Kimberly, MsMariah, Leigh: Thank you. I wasn't sure if people would like these or not.

Lynne: What makes it worse is that it's cold, and at night!

J.A., Rachel: Thanks. I try to include good details, so the reader can visualize.

Cassie Mae, Martin, 1000th Monkey: Do they live? That would be telling.

Hope Roberson said...

Yep! Those leave me begging to know what in the world is going on!!! Great hangers :)

Emily R. King said...

Nice movement in the first two. In combination with the third, I really want to know what's going on!

Jeannette said...

I really like the third one. Only two words, but two words people never want to hear. I am interested in what comes next.

Nick Wilford said...

These are great, very visual and intense. The third one definitely has me hooked too!

C.M.Brown said...

Intense! My pick is Chapter 15!

Stephen Tremp said...

"Poison gas" is a great way to end a chapter. Make me think the next chapter is a suspense filled action series.

Ink in the Book said...

Poison gas would make me turn the page faster than I could read the words!

Mark Murata said...

Thank you, Hope, Emily, C.M., for your kind words.

Jeannette, Nick, Stephen, and Ink: We agree that we all like poison gas, so long as it's happening to someone else.

elizabeth seckman said...

Yeah, I want to know how that poisonous gas plays out.

Rena said...

These are simple filled with tension. I want to know more. Great job.

Sara said...

Cool sentences. Lot's of tension. Especially all of them.

Trisha said...

Wow, somebody's world sure is falling apart. Great hangers!

Jenny Morris said...

Sounds like a lot of bad things happening! Great hangers!

Kelley Lynn said...

Wow!

This one is my favorite:
My senses were overwhelmed as I lay there, head lolling on hard wood, and I couldn’t differentiate between the steam and the smoke obscuring my vision as I blacked out.

Great writing!

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